How do you keep your readers captivated?
How do you keep them reading each and every word you write?
The difference between a so-so and an enthralling post is often the amount of ballast.
You know what I mean with ballast, don’t you?
Ever been on a backpacking holiday?
Packing can be a challenge.
But packing pannier bags for a cycling trip is an even bigger challenge.
You find yourself looking at the want-to-take stuff spread out on your bed.
First you throw out the non-essentials, like hairspray, an SLR camera, and your favorite skirt. Then you cut down on essentials: reduce the number of cycling shirts from three to two, and the number of trousers from two to one pair.
Every piece of luggage slows you down on a cycling trip. Each extra ounce drags you down when cycling uphill.
With blog posts it’s exactly the same.
Just one or two redundant phrases can cause your readers to abandon your post. Half way. Or earlier.
An abundance of words is demoralizing. It makes reading feel like an uphill battle.
That’s why you need to become a word weenie
Ever heard of a weight weenie?
It’s a road cyclist who’s obsessed with the weight of his bike. He’ll replace a component that weighs 70 grams with one that weighs 68 grams even if it costs 100 or 200 dollars more.
A weight weenie can’t sleep at night, considering the possibilities of shaving another 2 or 3 grams of the weight of his bike. He is relentless in his pursuit of finding the lightest frame, the lightest seat post, and even the lightest holder for his water bottle. A weight weenie complains in dedicated weight weenie forums about the false claims manufacturers make about the weight of parts.
With my hybrid bike, I definitely can’t play in the league of weight weenies. But I do obsess about the weight of words and sentences.
If you want to engage your readers and captivate their attention until the last sentence of your blog post, you need to become a word weenie, too.
6 ideas for shaving the weight of your blog posts:
1. Remove obvious information
Surprise people with new tips or a refreshing look on old information.
2. Eliminate long scenery descriptions
Keep your writing to the point. It’s simple: Don’t write anything your reader doesn’t want to read.
3. Discard self-indulgent look-at-me stuff
This may seem tricky because you can build a passionate following only if you show your readers your personality and a few tidbits of your life. This is how to do it: Use your personal stories as metaphors or examples to teach, help, and inspire. Keep your focus on your reader rather than on yourself.
4. Avoid duplicate information
When writing a first draft it’s easy to repeat the same information in different words. Re-read your draft to check whether each sentence has a meaning that builds on the sentence before.
For instance: While editing, I crossed out the following text in my first draft:
This may seem tricky because most readers like to get to know a blogger. You can build a passionate following only if you show your readers your personality, and at least a few tidbits of your life.
First drafts are full of duplicate information and threads of thoughts that don’t contribute to your message. Be rigorous when editing.
5. Strike out adverbs
These are the words that modify verbs or adjectives. Adverbs present additional information, for instance, on the manner in which an action is undertaken. This additional information is almost always redundant. My first draft said: It’s relatively easy to solve.
6. Cut adjectives
No adjectives at all can make your blog posts bland, but too many adjectives overwhelm your readers. These are the rules I try to observe:
- Before a noun, have a maximum of one adjective:
First you throw out the non-essentials, likea can ofhairspray, abulkySLR camera, and your favorite, blue, linenskirt. - Only follow the rule of three when using adjectives at the end of a sentence. End with the most powerful adjective: Removing ballast will make your blog posts more engaging, compelling, and enchanting.
- Replace wishy-washy adjectives with unusual or sensory words. Instead of wishy-washy I could have used bad, imperfect, or poor, but these words are all booooring. Good options are bland, stale, ho hum, etc. Bland adjectives wear your reader down. Flavorsome adjectives add meaning, emotion, and texture.
The truth about keeping your readers spellbound
Removing ballast isn’t enough to keep your readers engrossed.
The best cycling trips go over undulating roads: not-too-steep climbs, leisurely descents, and surprising views after a bend or on top of a hill.
Manage the pace of your story like an undulating road. Slow down with a few long sentences and long-ish paragraphs. Then present an easy read with quick bullet points, a few ultra-short sentences, or even a one-word paragraph.
Be relentless when you edit. Long sentences are fine, but unnecessary long sentences are the kiss of death.
Cycling uphill should be rewarded with a beautiful view, an exhilarating downhill journey, and the wonderful feeling of achievement that you made it. Your readers should be rewarded with inspiration, entertainment, fresh ideas, a feeling of satisfaction or a sense of happiness.
Never take your readers for granted. Always value their time. Become a word weenie!
Recommended reading on concise writing:
How to write concise and clear sentences
How to eliminate 4 types of wordiness
3 visual thinking tips for writers
Mehera says
Hi,
How gracefully you crafted this post, Henneke! Excellent tips. “Never take your readers for granted”. Memorization of it helps to keep our writing graph on track.Isn’t it?
Love your writing style. 🙂
Henneke says
I wrote this blog post almost four years ago, and I still like the comparison about weight weenies and word weenies 😉
Thank you for stopping by!
shaurya jain says
hello mam
I love your content !!
But I was wondering if weeding out adjectives and adverbs is a smart thing to do when writing about travel and places. Because from what I have seen, people tend to write very elaborate descriptions of places they visit.
what do you think Henneke ?
Henneke says
I’m not suggesting you should remove all adjectives and adverbs. It’s about choosing your words with care and avoiding wordiness. More details here:
https://www.enchantingmarketing.com/how-to-use-adjectives/
https://www.enchantingmarketing.com/how-to-use-adverbs/
Susan Neal says
Fantastic editing advice – thanks very much for these great tips, which I will definitely share. Love the cycling analogy and especially grateful for all the practical examples you’ve given.
Henneke says
Thank you, Susan. I appreciate you’ve taken the time to leave a comment. 🙂
Lisa says
Another great post Henneke. It’s been on my mind since I read it yesterday – thank you:) The specific grammar pointers are particularly useful – and the reminder about self indulgence.
And I’ve never heard of the term “weight weenie.” How great. It made me think of my mother – she’s a bit of a weight weenie when she goes hiking. Though to be fair, she’s well into her 70’s, has bad knees, and her hiking is often for 3-days at a time! Anyway, thanks again. Cheers, Lisa.
Henneke says
Hikers have even more reason to be weight weenies than cyclists!
Thank you for stopping by, Lisa 🙂
Terrence Blair says
Interesting tips. I like the tip about having a maximum of one adjective before a noun. I don’t remember seeing that one before. You can always achieve a terse prose if you strive to use mostly nouns and verbs.
Henneke says
That’s the rule I see myself breaking, but usually a sentence improves when I take an adjective out and leave just one. It can be difficult to choose, though.
Thank you for stopping by, Terence 🙂
Greg Strandberg says
Good tips. I’m guilty of #5 the most; adverbs just don’t turn up on my radar as much as adjectives.
I’m wondering how you know which three adjectives are the most powerful. Perhaps saying them out loud helps, if reading them over isn’t obvious.
Henneke says
Yeah, usually there’s one that feels stronger than the others. Reading aloud can help or thinking about which one has the most perceived impact.
Good to see you here again, Greg