For a moment, I appreciate the peacefulness.
Lying on the sofa for a mid-afternoon break, I hear a dove cooing. A car drives by at a distance. The bright sunlight lights up the room, and my pillow feels comfy.
Seconds later, I enter the hustle and bustle of an Istanbul market …
I see women in miniskirts. I hear drivers catcalling out of car windows. I see tourists bent under the weight of their backpacks. I hear shoe-shine brushes rattling against brass boxes. And I smell tobacco, sweat, fried food, and a whiff of salty sea air.
Good writers invite readers into a different world
What I was hearing, smelling, and seeing was not what was happening in my room. I was reading the book 10 Minutes and 38 Seconds in This Strange World by Elif Shafak.
This book reminds me of the two basic requirements of good storytelling. Firstly, a good storyteller keeps a good pace and uses cliffhangers to keep us hooked so we’re eager to find out what’s happening next.
And secondly, a storyteller pulls readers into a different world. We’re experiencing the story as if we’re there with the protagonist. A good storyteller directs a mental movie in the reader’s mind.
This post is about directing mental movies—a useful skill in any type of writing, whether you’re writing a novel, a business newsletter, a blog post, or a product description.
Vivid imagery creates a mental movie
Elif Shafak’s storytelling is extraordinarily vivid.
Even though I’ve never been to Turkey, it’s like I’m there, together with Leila—the main character of the book—and her friends. The descriptions pull us into their story:
Their house in Van was so large that even whispers echoed throughout. Shadows danced on the walls as if across cavernous space. A long, winding wooden staircase led from the living room to the first-floor landing.
The sensory experience gets even better when Shafak introduces taste and smell:
Vendors peeled salted cucumbers, squeezed fresh pickle juice, roasted chickpeas and yelled over one another while motorists blasted their horns for no reason at all. Smells of tobacco, sweat, perfume, fried food and an occasional reefer – albeit illegal – mingled with the briny sea air.
And:
On what was to be her last birthday, her friends had settled on a rich menu: lamb stew with aubergine puree, börek with spinach and feta cheese, kidney beans with spicy pastrami, stuffed green peppers and a little jar of fresh caviar. The cake was a surprise, supposedly, but Leila had overheard them discussing it; the walls in the flat were thinner than the slices of pastrami, and, after decades of heavy smoking and even heavier drinking, Nalan rasped when she whispered, her voice husky like sandpaper scraping on metal.
Sensory writing has the power to transport readers to a different world because we experience sensory words as if we’re actually hearing, smelling, tasting, seeing, and feeling what’s going on. Research suggests that our brain responds in the same way when we smell sweat as when we read about the smell of sweat, or when we hear a husky voice or read about it.
In business writing, we can use sensory writing to invite readers into our world, too. We can let readers imagine working with us or let them picture what it’s like to use your product. This may even increase a reader’s desire to work with us or to use our product.
Examples of imagery in business writing
Sharon Tanton is a fabulous storyteller and content marketing coach. In her newsletter earlier this week, she invites us into her garden:
I’m writing to you from my garden. Sitting by the pond, I’m making the most of the last sunny day before rain returns to the UK tomorrow.
There’s a blackbird singing on the fence in front of me, and a blanket of blossoms at my feet. Everything is green, so the orange marigolds shine brightly. They’ve seeded themselves among the beetroot, but I love their cheerfulness, so they can stay.
Sharon’s sensory description makes us feel we’re there in the garden with her, and she uses gardening as a metaphor to discuss how content marketing also requires you to “plant more than you need, pay attention to what thrives, and give lots away to the people you care about.”
(For more content marketing tips from Sharon, join her newsletter here.)
Imagery works also for product descriptions, allowing readers to imagine what it’s like to use your product or wear your fashion.
The copywriters at J Peterman, for instance, make a dress more appealing because we feel like we’re floating in it already, and when we wear it, will someone want to hold us in their arms, too?
There are certain nights in the Hudson Valley when the moon lights up the universe (…). The scientists say this is just sunlight reflecting off the moon. The result is a silvery blue hue of silky soft light. Serene. Moody yet playful. Dark but extraordinarily luminous. There is an other-worldly quality to it. I’ve always wanted to capture that light and hold it in my arms.
Floral Moonlight Dress (No. 5601). Lightweight (as if you’re floating) and sheer silk georgette fit-and-flare.
The phrase painting pictures with words is often used to describe vivid imagery. But the strongest imagery isn’t only visual; it often appeals to two or three different senses.
How to paint pictures using the 6 senses
We commonly talk about 5 senses:
- Sight: How does something look, including color, shape, or appearance
- Sound: What or who is making what kind of sound, and how loud or soft is it
- Touch: How does it feel when we touch something, including its texture, temperature, humidity, or even air pressure
- Smell: What kind of aroma is it—is it natural or artificial, strong or subtle, pleasant or repulsive, and what does it remind you of
- Taste: Whether something is sweet, sour, savory, salty, or bitter, or whether it tastes like a specific kind of fruit, vegetable, spice, etc.
On top of that, you can use motion as a 6th sense. When we use strong verbs to describe motion, readers experience the motion as if they’re there, too. You can feel the car swerving. You can sense the dancers graciously floating across the dance floor. The description of a roller-coaster may even make you dizzy.
An exercise in using imagery
You don’t have to turn yourself into a poet to write vivid imagery.
Try this simple exercise: Take 5 minutes to describe a scene using at least two different senses. You can describe where you are right now or a scene in the last 24 hours.
We tried this exercise last week together with 255 participants in a live Writing Huddle. Reading sensory descriptions from across the world made me feel connected, inspired, and humbled. Here’s a snapshot:
- I lift my face to the sun and let its warmth kiss my face. (Shanthi)
- A robin in the tree started singing—a bright song filled with joy and excitement. (Paul)
- I watch the beautiful light through thinning blossom. (Liz)
- The Amelanchier (or Shadbush) looks like a cloud. Hundreds of thousands of tiny white flowers are balancing in the cold air. It smells vanilla. (Véronique)
- Colors of beige are turning to soft shades of green. (Julie)
- The cat’s tail is brushing against my leg. (Tetiana)
- I smelled the soft aroma of pollen in the air and my nose filled up with slimy mucus. (Joel)
- A crow squawks in the distance and when I look up the sky is a brilliant blue. (Diana)
- I bit into the buttery flakes of my almond croissant as memories of my mom melted into my mouth. (Sheila)
As a writer, imagery allows you to be present in your surroundings. What do you hear? What do you smell? What do you see? Is there something you can touch and feel? Or taste?
By sharing what you’re experiencing, you can invite your readers into your world. It’s as if they’re there with you.
Write to connect
As writers, we’re at a physical distance from our readers.
But we can pull readers closer to us, invite them into our worlds, and make them feel like we’re together.
We can put an arm around a shoulder and whisper a few words of encouragement. We can pat a reader on their back and celebrate a small achievement—we made it through another day.
We can laugh together, or cry together.
Or we can simply let ourselves be, listen to the birdsong, and let life flow past us.
Writing is like magic sometimes.
30 imagery examples
The imagery examples below are organized by category. Click a link to jump ahead to a specific category:
Visual imagery (sight)
Auditory imagery (sound)
Olfactory imagery (smell)
Gustatory imagery (taste)
Tactile imagery (touch)
Kinesthetic imagery (movement)
Multi-sensory imagery
Literal vs figurative imagery
The imagery examples in this overview are all literal. They describe what you can see, hear, taste, or feel.
Imagery can also be figurative. For instance, someone can have a heart of stone. This doesn’t mean a heart looks literally like a stone; it means someone is cold-hearted, like a stone.
Another figurative example: After a long period of dry weather, the earth breathes a sigh of relief when the first rain arrives. The earth can’t inhale and exhale like a human or an animal. But it seems like the earth breathes a sigh of relief, like a person would when something arrives they’ve been waiting for a long time.
For more on figurative language, see these articles on metaphors, analogies, and similes, and check out these examples of personification.
1. Examples of visual imagery (sight)
In his book An Immense World, Ed Yong describes the size, color, and shape of a bold jumping spider:
Barely bigger than my smallest fingernail, the bold jumping spider is mostly black, except for white fuzz on its knees and vibrant turquoise splotches on the appendages that hold its fangs. It is unexpectedly cute. Its stocky body, short limbs, large head, and wide eyes are all rather childlike, and stir the same deep psychological bias that makes babies and puppies adorable.
By describing three aspects of visual imagery (size, color, and shape), Yong gives us a quick impression of what it looks like.
In her book The Island of the Missing Trees, Elif Shafak describes a house decorated by someone who loves the color blue:
The entrance was bright azure, with dangling evil eye beads and horseshoes nailed up. The chequered tablecloths were navy and white, the curtains a vivid sapphire, the tiles on the walls adorned with patterns in aquamarine, and even the wide, languid ceiling fans were of a similar hue.
That’s a lot of blue, right? Can you picture the scene?
In his book Arctic Dreams, Barry Lopez describes the colors of polar bears:
The brightest whites show up at the spring molt, the purest of these being those of young cubs. With exposure to sunlight, the hairs take on a subtle coloring; soft yellowish tones appear on the hips, along the flanks, and down the legs—a pale lemon wash, apricot yellows, cream buffs, straw whites. The tones deepen each year as the animal ages. In the low sunlight of a fall afternoon an older male’s fur might suggest the yellow golds of ripe wheat.
In her book River Kings, archaeologist Cat Jarman describes a bead found in a Viking grave:
The bead itself was carefully wrapped in tissue paper within a clear polythene bag. Its orange colour bordered on brown; it was approximately a centimetre long and half a centimetre wide, with neatly cut, faceted corners and a polished and shiny surface. Apart from a few scars on one side, and some dirt still stuck in the hole bored through it, the bead was in perfect condition.
And later on she writes:
To me, there was something compelling about that tiny bead. The smooth, almost translucent material; the sharply cut corners; the faceted shape with angles that looked so perfect and so modern. I couldn’t help but obsess over all the hands, all the lives, that it had intersected with over more than a millennium including, now, my own.
Imagery doesn’t always need an extensive description. In her book Free, Lea Ypi describes growing up in communist Albania where Coca Cola is so rare, her mother buys an empty can and displays it at home:
She spent the afternoon deliberating with my grandmother where to put it, and since it was empty, whether to adorn it with a fresh rose from the garden. They had decided that though the rose was an original idea, it would distract from the aesthetic value of the can, and so they had left it bare, on top of our best embroidered cloth.
The description above may seem bare. However, a more detailed description is unnecessary because we all know what a Coca Cola can looks like.
I remembered the imagery of the Coca Cola can on display long after I finished reading this book. Simple imagery can be strong and memorable.
In her book Fathoms, Rebecca Giggs describes our relationship with whales. Her picture of how ocean pollution impacts whales also stuck with me. Here’s how she describes the contents of a gut of a deceased sperm whale:
That was how I first learnt about the sperm whale, washed up dead on the Spanish coastline with a greenhouse, an entire greenhouse, in its belly. The flattened greenhouse — from a hydroponics business in Almería — enclosed tarps, hosepipes and ropes, flowerpots, a spray canister, and bits of synthetic burlap. It had once sheltered off-season tomatoes, grown for export to Britain. High winds likely collapsed the structure, bundling it from dryland into the ocean. (…) In addition to the greenhouse, the sperm whale had swallowed parts of a mattress, a coathanger, a ‘dishwater plastic pot’, and an ice-cream tub.
Again, the imagery is relatively sparsely described but more details are unnecessary. I can picture the greenhouse, the mattress, and the coathanger in the whale’s belly. The picture has stuck with me. As Giggs writes: “Inside the whale, the world.”
2. Examples of auditory imagery (sound)
Sayaka Murata starts her book Convenience Store Woman with a beautiful example of imagery. Note how the imagery is mostly auditory (tinkle, chime, beeps, rustle, clacking):
A convenience store is a world of sound. From the tinkle of the door chime to the voices of TV celebrities advertising new products over the in-store cable network, to the calls of the store workers, the beeps of the bar code scanner, the rustle of customers picking up items and placing them in baskets, and the clacking of heels walking around the store. It all blends into the convenience store sound that ceaselessly caresses my eardrums.
Do you also feel like you’re there in the supermarket, hearing all these sounds?
In his book The Eloquence of the Sardine, Bill François describes the underwater orchestra of fishes. Here’s an example:
The jack (or trevally) and the sunfish prefer higher notes and grind their teeth to play screeching melodies. The seahorse plays its own personal xylophone by scratching its neck with the bony ridges on the back of its head, while the catfish makes a high-pitched noise by plucking its spines. As for the humble goby, found in rock pools, no one has yet managed to work out the hydrodynamic mechanism that enables it to sing its love songs simply by blowing water out of its gills.
Can you almost hear all the sounds just from reading that?
In his book The Secret Knowledge of Water, Craig Childs describes the sounds he hears when walking in the desert:
Across the flats I heard only the hushing sound of my boots through sand, then the sharper sound of my boots through the broken granite above the washes. The hum of one of the stray breezes through thousands of saguaro cactus needles. The sound of creosote leaves scratching the brim of my hat.
A short list with auditory words >>
3. Olfactory imagery (smell)
In The Maid, a whodunnit by Nita Prose, Molly describes entering the lobby of the Regency Grand Hotel where she works as maid:
But perhaps my favorite part of the lobby is the olfactory sensation, that first redolent breath as I take in the scent of the hotel itself at the start of every shift – the mélange of ladies’ fine perfumes, the dark musk of the leather armchairs, the tangy zing of lemon polish that’s used twice daily on the gleaming marble floors.
Can you imagine entering the lobby and smelling the mix of aromas?
Jude Stewart has written a guide book to smells titled Revelations in Air. Here’s how she describes the smell of ginger:
The scent combines the spreading deep heat of cinnamon with a bright citrus burst. It smells of sunshine, the tropics, the somnolent pleasure of lazing on a beach compelled to motion only by your body’s inclinations and your mood.
And the smell of bacon:
The smell holds the promise of good pork and fat’s full, rounded savor. It’s sweet, syrupy, crystalline. It pings satisfyingly with brine. You might catch a whiff of smoke edging the smell delicately; one sniffs for that note constantly, checking for imminent burn.
Can you smell it?
4. Gustatory imagery (taste)
Grace Dent describes her favorite dish in restaurant Tallow in Tunbridge Wells (UK):
My favourite course may well have been the hake starter, featuring plump, perfectly timed fried white fish in a heavenly puddle of elegant curry sauce, with three of the fattest, meatiest, shelled mussels drinking in the fragrant broth.
And she describes the razor clam and blood sausage on toast at the Lisboeta in London:
it tasted like musky armpit
Jay Rayner describes the small plated dishes at the Acme Fire Cult in London:
Leeks are grilled until the point of surrender, when they are sweet and soft. They are then served at room temperature with their own version of romesco sauce, in which the ground almonds have been substituted with ground pistachios. It’s a study in verdant shades of green. There’s a welcome acidity to the grainy romesco. New potatoes have been smoked and are lubricated by a tahini mayo and a nutty chilli oil or rayu, made with grains from the brewery. Grilled cauliflower florets come in a ripe, buttery Indian-accented mess of a sauce under ribbons of pickled onion.
Food descriptions are rarely gustatory only. For instance, Rayner describes the leeks as soft (tactile) and refers to shades of green (visual).
A short list of words describing taste >>
5. Tactile imagery (touch)
In her book The Soul of an Octopus, Sy Montgomery describes the feeling when an octopus named Athena touches her with its tentacles:
Athena’s suction is gentle, though insistent. It pulls me like an alien’s kiss.
And she describes how Athena’s head feels:
As I hold her glittering gaze, I instinctively reach to touch her head. “As supple as leather, as tough as steel, as cold as night,” Hugo wrote of the octopus’s flesh; but to my surprise, her head is silky and softer than custard.
For an octopus, taste and touch are strangely connected:
Octopuses can taste with their entire bodies, but this sense is most exquisitely developed in their suckers. Athena’s is an exceptionally intimate embrace. She is at once touching and tasting my skin, and possibly the muscle, bone, and blood beneath. Though we have only just met, Athena already knows me in a way no being has known me before.
A short list of tactile words >>
6. Kinesthetic imagery (movement)
This is from Niall Williams’ This Is Happiness:
(…) she whirled around the kitchen with the briskness of those butterflies that must condense a lifetime into a few days.
Note how the word whirl is a strong verb giving a sense of a fast, circular-like motion. This feeling of motion is amplified by the metaphor of the butterfly.
In his book An Immense World, Ed Yong describes the different sensory perceptions of animals.
For instance, he describes how an elephant uses his trunk to smell its surroundings. He uses strong verbs to describe the trunk’s motions:
Whether an elephant is walking or feeding, alarmed or relaxed, its trunk is constantly in motion, swinging, coiling, twisting, scanning, sensing.
This series of verbs (swinging, coiling, twisting, scanning, sensing) helps create the impression of the trunk being constantly in motion. You can imagine it, right?
Yong also describe the difference of movement between light and smell:
Unlike light, which always moves in a straight line, smells diffuse and seep, flood and swirl.
A short list of words describing motion >>
7. Examples of multi-sensory imagery
Benjamin Myers creates a multi-sensory picture in this poetic sentence from his book The Offing:
Sitting here now by the open window, a glissando of birdsong on the very lightest of breezes that carries with it the scent of a final incoming summer, I cling to poetry as I cling to life.
The open window is a visual detail, the glissando of birdsong is auditory, the lightest of breezes could be tactile or a sense of movement, the scent of the incoming summer hints at a olfactory (smell-related) detail.
And this is from Myers’ book The Perfect Golden Circle:
The sunset this evening is spectacular, the sky a scree of fleshy pinks and fiery oranges as both men watch in wordless wonder.
The last chattering notes of bird calls become infrequent, until finally there is nothing but the gaps between them, and those gaps take the shape of long silence that settles the nerves and cools the blood.
Lovely, isn’t it?
First, there’s the visual imagery (fleshy pinks and fiery oranges), then there’s the auditory imagery (chattering notes of bird calls and long silence), and it ends with motion and tactile imagery (settling the nerves and cools the blood).
This is how Robin Wall Kimmerer starts her book Braiding Sweetgrass:
Hold out your hands and let me lay upon them a sheaf of freshly picked sweetgrass, loose and flowing, like newly washed hair. Golden green and glossy above, the stems are banded with purple and white where they meet the ground. Hold the bundle up to your nose. Find the fragrance of honeyed vanilla over the scent of river water and black earth and you understand its scientific name: Hierochloe odorata, meaning the fragrant, holy grass.
Isn’t that a lovely introduction to how sweetgrass delights your senses?
This short paragraph includes tactile imagery (the sweetgrass feels loose and flowing like newly washed hair and it’s glossy), visual imagery (golden green, purple, and white), and olfactory imagery (the fragrance of honeyed vanilla over the scent of river water and black earth).
In his book The Secret Knowledge of Water, Craig Childs describes the sight, motion, and sounds of a waterfall in the dessert:
The vision was incongruous: desert cliffs rising thousands of feet, bare and dry as chalkboards, and out of one, the emergence of water. It plunged hundreds of feet from the high face, pounding against several ledges, then rumbled into boulders with the strength of a river. What was more incongruous than the sight was the sound. This was a spring by definition, a tap into an underground water source, not bubbling and singing like the larger springs I had seen, but bellowing furiously at the air.
351 Strong Verbs to Make Your Content Pop, Fizz and Sparkle >>
In The Book of Difficult Fruit, Kate Lebo describes the quince, first a visual description:
The fruit was yellow under a scrim of gray fuzz, voluptuous and firm, like pregnant pears.
Next, she describes the smell of quince:
I inhaled this stranger, my first quince, until my nose lost track of honey and citrus, but still held a wisp of cool, clean peel, an idea of sweetness, a thin hit of rose.
And there’s tactile and gustatory imagery:
The quince was firmer than an apple. I felt, for a moment, like I was using my teeth as a knife. Then an astringent sour sensation wicked all the moisture from my mouth. I stood dumb, cotton-tongued, the quince loose in my hand. I’d expected it to taste the way it smelled.
Lastly, Lebo describes the sensory transformation when you cook quince:
As quince stews, its cream-white flesh turns deep rose, and its fragrance transforms from something heavenly to something earthbound but still delicious. Quince has a satisfying grainy texture when cooked, like a pear that has kept its composure.
Through Keto’s stories and sensory descriptions, readers get to know these difficult and unusual fruits.
In All the Pretty Horses, Cormac McCarthy describes a scene 16-year old John Grady Cole and his best friend Lacey Rawlins:
The night was almost warm. He and Rawlins lay in the road where they could feel the heat coming off the blacktop against their backs and they watched stars falling down the long black slope of the firmament. In the distance they heard a door slam. A voice called. A coyote that had been yammering somewhere in the hills to the south stopped. Then it began again.
The description moves effortlessly from tactile (the warm night, heat against their backs) to visual (stars falling, the long black slope of the firmament) and auditory (a voice called, a coyote is yammering).
Books mentioned in this post:
- 10 Minutes 38 Seconds in This Strange World by Elif Shafak (highly recommended)
- The Island of Missing Trees by Elif Shafak (highly recommended)
- An Immense World: How Animal Senses Reveal the Hidden Realms Around Us by Ed Yong (highly recommended)
- Arctic Dreams by Barry Lopez
- River Kings by Cat Jarman
- Free by Lea Ypi (recommended)
- Fathoms: The World in the Whale by Rebecca Giggs (recommended)
- Convenience Store Woman by Sayaka Murata (recommended)
- The Eloquence of the Sardine by Bill François (highly recommended)
- The Secret Knowledge of Water by Craig Childs (highly recommended)
- The Soul of an Octopus by Sy Montgomery (recommended)
- This Is Happiness by Niall Williams (recommended)
- The Offing by Benjamin Myers (highly recommended)
- The Perfect Golden Circle by Benjamin Myers (highly recommended)
- Braiding Sweetgrass by Robin Wall Kimmerer (highly recommended)
- The Book of Difficult Fruit: Arguments for the Tart, Tender, and Unruly by Kate Lebo (highly recommended)
- All the Pretty Horses by Cormac McCarthy (highly recommended)
Recommended reading on imagery in writing:
The magic of sensory words
The ladder of abstract vs concrete language
How vivid language makes your message unforgettable [Case study]
Harold King says
enjoyed the swift education in writing.
Henneke says
Thank you, Harold. Happy writing!
Deniz says
It’s true. Masterly writings must ‘show’ the readers and not ‘tell’…. From my angle of view, imagery is the cornerstone of a concise prose or any piece of writing…..Thank you for the eye-opening session above
Henneke says
I love concise writing with strong imagery. It’s a careful balance. Too much imagery can slow the writing down too much. And not enough imagery makes the writing feel flat.
Thank you for stopping by again, Deniz. Happy writing!
Andy says
Is it just me or using flowery words in storytelling actually destroys the imagery it is intended to create?
Take a look at this:
“Shadows danced on the walls as if across cavernous space.”
I would stop reading if I came across this sentence in a story.
Henneke says
Too much flowery language can indeed slow readers down.
In this case, the imagery didn’t slow me down. The opposite was true: the imagery drew me into the story helping me visualize the story.
Of course, to some extent, it’s a personal preference.
Tony Craig says
Greetings Henneke!
Your writing is always thought clear, well articulated and relatable to any reader who loves reading master piece articles! I agree with you that imagery is second to none when it comes to blending a message to readers’ emotions! Well matched images to content and its context bring out emotions. Thank you for this article.
Keep doing what you do best.
Cheers
Tony
Henneke says
I’m glad you enjoyed this article, Tony. Thank you for your compliment, and for stopping by!
Kari Grace says
Wow! I’ve been reading your blog for a while now but never had the privilege until yesterday (on the replay) to actually “meet” you. I thoroughly enjoyed the experience, and Sharon added so much to the fun!
I’m a really tactile sanguine extrovert transplanted Brit now living in North Carolina, U.S. I tell folks over here, “I’m Missouri, the show-me state.” And I am. I’m ok with tell, but I prefer show. It paints the picture so much better!
Which probably explains my fascination with books over movies – you get to imagine with books and it’s a rare movie that turns out better than the book in my opinion.
How do you pronounce your name? I try hard but I want to get it right when I share your wonderful wisdom…
Henneke says
Hi Kari – I’m glad you enjoyed the Writing Huddle! Thank you for letting me know. I also prefer reading books over watching movies.
I will pass your compliment on to Sharon 🙂
The first e of Henneke is like the first e of elephant. The second and third e of Henneke are like the second e of elephant. You find a short recording on my home page.
Faizan Ali says
I became fond of your posts really, Henneke.
I agree sensory writing can fetch you in the world the writing piece talks about.
I have read so many books around various topics where I felt the same.
And guess what, when you sleep you also have dreams of that eternal world.
It’s my own experience!
Henneke says
Thank you so much for your compliment, Faizan. I’m glad you’re enjoying my writing.
Jan Mastenbroek - known to many as "Oom Jan". says
Dank u wel, Henneke!
So much good to absorb… so much to improve my website…
I am a freedom activist – and try with my website to reach my children, my grand-children and my Afrikaner people. So difficult after 26 long years of oppression – as if they have withdrawn from everything … I have tried to apply your methods before, but today you have reached my soul … My message will be the same but I will apply the magic you showed me today. Thank you once again!
Henneke says
I’m glad you enjoyed this article about imagery, Jan. Happy writing!
SANTOSH THAKUR says
It’s so wonderful. As you’ve mentioned we can pull the readers at a physical distance and make them feel as if they are there through sensory words.
I’m thrilled with this art of copywriting skills.
Thank you
Santosh Thakur
Henneke says
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Santosh. Happy writing!
Tim Froling says
silent photograph
a summer holiday past
watches over my work
Henneke says
Very evocative!
Brett Riley says
Wow, I love this. I could imagine every scene and I felt as though I was there. At the moment where I am, I can hear the many types of birds happily twittering in the trees after this morning’s rain. Oh, and there is the sound of the liar bird.
Living in Australia, I’ll only be able to listen to recordings of the huddle as they are in the wee small hours of the morning
Henneke says
I wish it was possible to arrange events at a time that would work for everyone but I’m glad you’ve been able to watch the recording.
I had never heard of a Lyre bird before so looked it up and came across a wonderful short video about the songs of the Lyre bird (with David Attenborough). Thank you for sharing. I can now picture you listening to the birds 🙂
Aasim Tasawar says
Thank you for writing huddle and this great blog.
I’ve a question. What is the difference between Sensory words and Visceral words? Examples plz
Henneke says
I have never come across the phrase visceral words. I imagine that what is meant is more emotional words. See also my article about power words here: https://www.enchantingmarketing.com/power-words/
C A Holmes says
I am in my strangely exotic blue office, surrounded by paintings of wild horses, I smell the oak bursting into bloom outside my window, while listening to radio warnings as the light fades. My mouth tastes like curry awash in memory of other lives where there was always plague, and the burning at the ghats.
Thank you for reminding me to come to my senses.
Stay safe n well.
Henneke says
I can picture you in your office. Love the idea that you can smell the oak bursting into bloom.
I find there’s something special to return to our senses, especially in times like these it’s a good way for me to get out of my head and ground myself into the here and now so I can appreciate the small things in life.
I hope you’re staying safe and well, too. ♥️
Suu says
This post is encouraging me.
Thank you!
Henneke says
Thank you, Suu. Happy writing!
Dana Z says
Another wonderful blog article, Henneke! As I read it, I could see your words coming to life, inviting me to explore ways to incorporate more sensory language into my own writing. Thank you :).
Henneke says
What a lovely comment. Thank you, Dana. Happy writing!
Phil LeMaster says
Raven caws and nips
Prairie dog defends in fits
Dusty spring warriors
Fitting what I just noticed on a walk. Before reading this awesome post!
Thank you!
Henneke says
I just came back from my walk in the rain. It’s so relaxing to listen to the raindrops falling on the leaves. A beautiful spring shower.
Julia Cameron says
Thank you for your book recommendations, Henneke. I don’t much fiction so I never know what book to choose. Thanks to you I have just finished American Kingpin and My Father, the Pornographer. I enjoyed them both. I will definitely have a look at Elif Shafak. Saying that I should really be getting on with your course!
Henneke says
I’m glad you enjoyed those two books. Elif Shafak’s book is very different but perhaps even better.
And I hope you’re enjoying my copywriting course, too! 🙂
Robert says
I edit business books, not fiction. A few years back I was emailed by a lady who lives only 2km away, and she had written her first novel. It was as thick as Lord of the Rings. My inclination was to decline, but I contacted the person who had referred her. “Robert, don’t you know anything about art? She has been a landscape artist for over 40 years, roughly in the style of John Constable, and she has accumulated over 200 Awards.” Well, sorry, I knew Constable’s work but not this lady. I decided to have just one meeting with her. A short meeting. I had had approaches from first time fiction writers before, so I opened with my Killer Question: Why do you want to write? She replied, “I have been an artist for 40 years, and now I want to paint with words.” Well, that reply was a hundred times better than any other response anyone had ever given me! So when I saw Sharon’s tweet with ‘Paint Pictures with Words’ I simply had to jump right over and read your blog post here. It is excellent guidance on how to make words stream off the page and straight into the reader’s heart and/or brain. 🙂
Henneke says
Great story! Thank you for sharing, Robert. It would be interesting to find out whether painters who write use more visual words than people who don’t paint.
Margie says
Love this… writing is like magic. So true.
Thanks for inspiring me to create some magic today.
So sorry I missed the Huddle!
Henneke says
It does feel like magic to me, how we can connect with each other with our written words.
Thanks for stopping by, Margie. I hope you’re keeping well and safe.
Katharine says
All I can think of right now is that I have an aubergine and some pickled okra in the fridge. Haha!
So, yes, I think I was drawn in!
And my main character, who is escaping his house MUST smell the rust of the old screen door. So I must edit. Thanks!
Henneke says
Sometimes people tell me my writing makes them hungry 😉
Katharine says
I’ve never experienced that before today! 🙂
Jeraldene says
I quite enjoy the idea of using sensory descriptions. Although, it is decidedly more challenging to make use thereof when writing in the third person.
Henneke says
There are situations where it’s hard to use sensory descriptions but often you can still sneak in a sensory word or two, often metaphorically.
When writing her book Three Women, Lisa Taddeo would specifically ask interviewees for sensory details. Here’s an example on how her interviewing would go: “Maggie would say, ‘So then we started kissing.’ And I’d say, ‘Wait, back up. Where were you sitting? What did you smell like? What were you wearing?’ I knew how interior I wanted to get.” (from: https://www.theguardian.com/books/2019/dec/06/lisa-taddeo-interview-three-women)
David Holliday says
Hi Henneke,
Yes, we all find ourselves in some kind of quarantine, reading and writing allows us a way to not be confined.
I enjoyed this post because it showed me the many places that we can move about without physically moving by using our 6th sense, “Motion”.
David Holliday
Henneke says
That reminds me of this quote of Ahmet Altan:
“I am writing this in a prison cell.
But I am not in prison.
I am a writer.
I am neither where I am nor where I am not.
You can imprison me but you cannot keep me here.”
(from his book I Will Never See the World Again: The Memoir of an Imprisoned Writer)
Lisa Sicard says
Henneke, I love this, I will surely practice this with my future writing. I find if I go out for a walk it helps in the process. I can actually feel, smell and hear things better along my walk. I’ll try to pull a reader in through those senses now going forward.
I had trouble with the live session the other week. But now I will check out the replay – so glad you have it!
Thank you and stay well!
Henneke says
Yes, I find that, too. Walking is great for sensory experiences. I even like walking in the dark, hearing the ducks quacking, looking up at the twinkling stars, smelling the freshly cut grass.
I’m sorry that you had trouble with the live session last week. Sometimes, browser settings can interfere. If you struggle with the replay, try a different browser.
Kitty Kilian says
I like the cat brushing against my legs 😉
I do not care much for smell and I always skip over descriptions of smell. Interesting, huh.
I do love cats, though.
Thinking about cliffhangers: I just finished reading Outlander by Diana Gabaldon. It keeps you reading allright, because the cliffhangers drive you on and on, but really, it is quite a distateful book. Ethically. I wonder how I got to the last of the 850 pages!
Henneke says
Interesting point about smell. I find that smells can evoke some of my strongest memories. When I think of living in Hong Kong, I think of all the different smells first before thinking of the sound of the traffic, the suffocating feeling of the humid air, and the sights of the harbor. And strangely enough, I don’t consider myself to have a particular good sense of smell. For years, I smelled very little as I had a chronic cold. It has improved over recent years.
It sounds like I don’t need to add Outlander to my reading list 🙂
Kitty Kilian says
I know smell can bring back memories extremely strongly and fast. It sometimes does. And yet it holds little interest for me 😉 I don’t really care for descriptions of food, either.
Never do I read a description of a bar of chocolate that makes me want to go looking for my own in the fridge.
Sex scenes, however, are hard to ignore. I wonder if anyone has ever done any research into this. I do know about the mirror neurons etc.. but do the neurons mirror all of the senses in the same amount?
Henneke says
I’m the opposite of you. I like reading good food descriptions but I always skip sex scenes.
I imagine some differences may be hard-wired, but our brains are also remarkably adaptable so people who for instance lose their sight may develop stronger sense of hearing or touch. The late Oliver Sacks wrote a great article about that: https://www.nytimes.com/2011/01/01/opinion/01sacks.html
Kitty Kilian says
He he ?
I am not saying I prefer the sex scenes. Just that they are harder to ignore.
I do not read Oliver Sacks. Ever.
Rachel Cooper says
Lovely, Henneke! A breath of fresh air as always, and always useful. Thank you too for the Writing Huddle last week. You and Sharon brought together writers from all over the world!
Henneke says
Thank you so much for joining the Writing Huddle last week. I found it a humbling experience to be writing together with so many across the whole world.
Stephen Q says
Theme for me is action verbs and PRESENT tense. First blush impression. You give so much so often as I wave away the remaining hairs on my self-inflicted shiny bald pate!
So there. I know I can do this, thanks to you.
Henneke says
Yes, present tense is a good suggestion, too, because that makes it easier to be present while the story is developing.
The first draft of my opening paragraph was initially in the past tense but I changed it to the present tense. It feels better.
Thank you, Stephen. I appreciate your support.